Well shit...

[simonheros]

I made this when I was just- emotionless. Not really meant to be a rap, more of a poem. It just summed up my whole day.... I honestly think it's trash, but it made me feel a bit better.

I didn't get into the high school of my fucking dreams
in the background were the yells and the screams
my parents were pissed at me
now let's go back and see what I'd see

The letter came home one day
I walked home slowly
thinkin' 'bout everything that was gonna happen
everything would be okay

Now I feel lost and not sure what to think
as if it ain't bad enough I now needed a shrink
because when the letter came home
my sister opened it up and what did you know..............

I didn't get into the high school of my fucking dreams
going to a ghetto ass high school
everyone else tryin' act fuckin' cool
And I guess that's just how it seems

I don't have anymore dreams
my bad luck and enemies are all stuck in one team
I just have nightmares all in my sleep
sometimes I see myself as the creep
and there was my soul trapped
that wouldn't make a single peep

My life is stuck in a trap
wanted to work on laptops on my lap
but my dreams of engineering
it seems like they've veering
away from me

I didn't get into the high school of my fucking dreams
and you wouldn't see tears on me...

Lyrics by: simonheros

My whole day wrapped up..

[Just Jim]

This is worse than the time I put the Game lyrics in red...can you please either centre or left align those lyrics.

[Just Jim]

I'm not a professor on poems or anything so I'm afraid I can't offer you constructive commentary.
I liked it though!

[Chino]

(04-12-2012 12:01 AM)Just Jim Wrote:  I'm not a professor on poems or anything so I'm afraid I can't offer you constructive commentary.
I liked it though!

well no one has to be a professor to offer constructive critism
a simple poem deserves simple praise lol
btw reminds me of my high school days

[Whisper_Of_Silence]

nice poem better than what i usually see in this crappy forum-



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[GIFDEAD]

(04-22-2012 08:00 PM)Whisper_Of_Silence Wrote:  nice poem better than what i usually see in this crappy forum-



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Be quiet, nutsack.

[Just Jim]

(04-22-2012 08:00 PM)Whisper_Of_Silence Wrote:  nice poem better than what i usually see in this crappy forum-



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ha why do you keep coming back? is this some pathetic form of trolling or are you actually this sad??

[Whisper_Of_Silence]

coming back.? when did i leave..?

the only thing sad in here is the full of shit you are
thats why you cant see your self,,

JIM SAID....im not a professor.!
but your deamm sure talking like one, snap out of it
you and gassed up chino.


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oh shit didnt even see you GiveHead ?

[Gezus]

That's enough guys. Stop polluting this thread.

[Just Jim]

aww but Gezus...

[Whisper_Of_Silence]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aTUhqbyV5...re=related

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aTUhqbyV5...re=related



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