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**IgnoranceIsVenomous** · 07-19-2011, 04:59 PM

This is a paper im writing for a scholarship. The question is, What are my Career Goals. Please tell me what you think.

What are my Career Goals?

I always have and always will endeavor in the task of solving the mysteries of the universe. Ever since I was a child I have always been captivated by the use of logic, and common sense; which helped me to form a better understanding of the nature of problem solving. When not concentrating on my studies I often turned to reading books by authors such as, Plato, Socrates, Homer, Milton, Dante, and Thoreau. Their timeless classics offered me several unique perspectives not only on the course of human nature, but the nature of the universe as well. They educated me on the importance of virtue, patience, judgment, and language. For these specific traits cannot truly be defined by any words our alphabet can create. Only in the mind of the perceiver can these words of wisdom portray any meaning. To truly comprehend these words you would have to be not only the creator of the word, but of its meaning as well. My career goal is a simple one, to be educated in the highest degree of these four very complex words.
My plan is simple, take and attend every class I can in the Humanities, History, Philosophy, and English department. After I achieve my degree in General Studies, I intend to take my new found knowledge Cape Fear has given me and transfer to The University of North Carolina at Wilmington. At UNCW, I will continue to study Philosophy, Humanities, History, and English for another four years, obtaining yet another degree. With these degrees in hand I will then take my studies to the next level once again for another four years of study concentrating in English and Philosophy at an Ivy League School.
When complete, I intend on taking my strenuous education and use it to benefit others. I plan on eventually becoming first a high school teacher of English. Being an English teacher will offer me a great perspective on the teaching side of the relationship, something I have been looking forward to. After some years of teaching in high school I plan on applying to a college or university in the Philosophy department, thus becoming a Professor of Philosophy.
We are all put on this Earth for a purpose. It is purpose that creates, defines, and inspires the individual. Discovering that purpose is the ultimate key to success, happiness, and overall, accomplishment. When this discovery arises, most people are either too scared of it, or do not realize it when it knocks on their door. I have experienced what I believe to be that discovery, that upper calling toward my destiny. This is but the first step on the stairway of higher knowledge, and at the top of that tower there is a view so extraordinary and so beautiful, that it can only be appreciated by those select few who have seen it.
A great man once said, “For what does it profit a man to gain the world and lose his soul?” That benevolent man chose to make his life about giving and educating. Not for his own personal gain, but for the gain of the people as one. This courageous life ultimately caused his death and it is perhaps the most celebrated story of life, death, and resurrection. He is forever timeless and will always sit at the right hand of God forever in paradise. That man of course, was Jesus Christ.

**Nikola** · 10-09-2011, 04:32 PM

(07-19-2011 04:59 PM)IgnoranceIsVenomous Wrote: When not concentrating on my studies I often turned to reading books by authors such as,[no need for comma here] Plato, Socrates, Homer, Milton, Dante,[again, no need for comma, especially before 'and'] and Thoreau.

Only read the first few lines or so. Is it a scholarship for college? If it is, I think your chances are slim.

**Fuzzly Bear** · 10-09-2011, 04:52 PM

Good luck bro. You'd probably need a phD to be a really great professor. I take it that's what you mean?

Also, this thing at the top of the tower, it's the knowledge that you won't stop climbing the tower until you die, and then you'll be dead.

Language is pretty important, its limits are those of your world, but those other ones are just words.

What's this all about?

**Asshole** · 10-09-2011, 06:28 PM

you definitely need the oxford comma lol! and the religious part will probably hurt you unless its a religious college

**YaelTheGreat** · 10-09-2011, 06:36 PM

Work on your punctuation as well as the structure of the essay. You should also focus a little less on your wealth of knowledge- include it, just not as much as you have- and focus on the what you want to accomplish in life. Showcase your knowledge through the mastery of language and words. Work on the structure of the essay as well.

Nikola, if you have nothing worthwhile to say, Fuck Off.

**Nikola** · (This post was last modified: 10-09-2011 07:20 PM by Nikola.)

(10-09-2011 06:36 PM)YaelTheGreat Wrote: Work on your punctuation as well as the structure of the essay. You should also focus a little less on your wealth of knowledge- include it, just not as much as you have- and focus on the what you want to accomplish in life. Showcase your knowledge through the mastery of language and words. Work on the structure of the essay as well.

Nikola, if you have nothing worthwhile to say, Fuck Off[why capitalize?].

Who's to say what's worthwhile to say? The man asked us what we think so I told him.

Oh ok, I'll play along, here's a piece of advice: work on the structure of the essay as well.

**YaelTheGreat** · (This post was last modified: 10-09-2011 07:25 PM by YaelTheGreat.)

Yeah I repeated for emphasis, plus I forgot I said it the first time. Also, you said nothing useful. Don't repeat what he has already stated and then say his chances are slim without critiquing or even reading it.

**Nikola** · (This post was last modified: 10-09-2011 07:33 PM by Nikola.)

(10-09-2011 07:24 PM)YaelTheGreat Wrote: Yeah I repeated for emphasis, plus I forgot I said it the first time. Also, you said nothing useful. Don't repeat what he has already stated and then say his chances are slim without critiquing or even reading it.

Sometimes a glance is enough; it just doesn't seem to me a scholarship essay. Oh and Laz is right about the religion part (maybe you should change it).

By the way, I was only joking in my last post; there's no need to get amped up over this.

**YaelTheGreat** · 10-09-2011, 07:35 PM

I agree with the religious part too.