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I thought it would be a good idea to create a thread for those who write short stories, or stories/movies of any kind; also for feedback on those stories.

I have been writting for a while; here is one I never finished, I only wrote down the base Idea, with little detail or script:
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A group of four young men, Peter, Tom, Andy and Richard find themselves in possetion
of some coke, they decide to sell it. Getting some information as o a seller know as Brigg,
they meet him. The four a nervous, as Briggs is not a simple druggy, but is an organised
gangsta. The 5 converse, and the sale is about to take place, when Briggs reveals that the
coke actually belongs to him; Peter, Tom and Andy start panacking, however Richard seems calm.
He boldly tells Briggs that he was not able to old the coke and so, if he wants it back the deal
will take place. Briggs impressed by his boldness, goes through with the deal.

Tom, Andy and Peter are excited and when they get back Andies place, they say he was the reason
the deal happened. The four decide to go into the drug business using the money they made from
the deal to buy more drugs. The four decide they need a front man, someone who will do the deals.
Andy, Tom and Peter say it sould be Richard. Richard is incially hesitant, but agrees.

Deals take place and the group manage to make some money. Andy receives information about a large
quantity of fine coke, and the four decide to use all their money to buy this coke. They have a
meeting with Salve, who they are told is shifty. They arrange a meeting in a restarount and go
to the meeting, with Andy staying in the car, Tom sitting at the bar and Peter accomanieing Richard
to the meeting. The four have 80k to buy the coke; Richard inicially offers 25k, which Salve refuses
imediantly. They converse a little and Salve goes to the restroom, meanwhile Peter and Richard
talk. Peter says Richard may have lost them the deal, but Richard says Salve is still there and
if he thought the offer was so bad he would of left then and there. Salves comes back to the tabel
and asks if they are going to make a offer worth taking; Richard replies by saying that the coke
must have some heat on it, and guesses it comes from a organised souce, and so says Salve must want
the coke of his hands, before they find out he has it, Salve is angered by his. Richard says its 25k
or nothing, Salve refuses again, and Richard says the meeting is over and is about to leave the table,
when Salve says wait, he then says 45k, Richard offers 35k and says he will forget how he got the coke,
implying that if the gangsters where to find out, he would not give up Salve. Salve agrees and the
they go outside to exchange, they check the coke and Salve checks the money, and then he leaves.
Tom receives a signal that the deal is completed and then goes to the car and Andy and Tom drive off.


Tom and Andy sit in Andys front room, arguing about how the deal went, when Richard and Peter walk in,
Richard puts the bag on the table and opens it up to reveal the bag is full of packets of coke, the group
are amazed. Richard says, they can either take there share, or they can pool it together and sell it for
a huge profit, they agree to pool it together.

Deal takes place with gangsters - Briggs involved. Meets Richard says he is impressed with him and offers
him a job. Richard says he won't as he is in partnership with his friends. Briggs takes him to his car,
where he shows him the trunk of his car and says Peter was going to steal the coke and sell it himself.
He then opens the truck where Peter has been tied up, Briggs then shoots Peter in the head. Briggs advises
Richard to think about it. Richard says he will speak to his friends.

Richard finds Andy crying on his sofa, drinking. Andy says he is sorry he abandoned Richard, and that he saw
Peter taken captive. Richard then tells him that Peter was trying to steal the coke, and explain that Briggs
told him this. Tom arrives with the money and the three split it. Andy says he can't do it anymore. Tom says
he can't either. Richard consoles them and says goodbye to both of them. He then calls Briggs and tells him
he accepts his job offer.

Briggs takes him to his boss, Mr Huges. Richard progresses and is made the front man of Mr Hughs major deals.
Richard implements a system where he record all deals using a audio recording device and then feeds it to
Mr Hughs, which impresses him.

Mr Hughs is about to go into a meeting with Richard alongside him, Hughs says he can come into the meeting, but
if he does, he will no longer have "clean hands", or that he can't stay away from that side of the business which
would mean he would note be in so much danger, as he would not know anything. Hughs says he will stay away.

Later on Richard gets into the dirty side of the business and works his way to being a assassin for Hughs. Hughs
is impressed and says he has contacts that could use Richard if he so wished.

(When Hughs and Richard where speaking about going dirty, Richard says that if he did, Hughs would never let him
out. Hughs says he will if he provides a insurance policy - that being either he saves Hughs life or he leaves him
a large some of money, equiverlent to his services to Hughs. If he does he will be given a new identity not linked
to crime)

Richard has a deal to kill Hughs, meets Hughs and says this counts as saving his life, Hughs says he has left him the
information as to the new identity in a locker at the airport. Richard goes there to find a large sum of money and
a id card with his original name on it. Hughs then explains in a letter that Richard was only known to him, to others
his identity was either hidden or they had an alius.